01 August 2012

Default, A Challenge

nagpalya ang makina
kahina-hinalang paraan ng pagkita ng salapi
umuumbok ang supot dahil sa kapupunan
nawalan ng kahinahunan ang lalaki
ang mga taimtim na hinaing sa mga diyos ay nagbuhat sa lahat ng altar
lubusang pagtatakwil sa paniniwala

nagpalya ang kaluluwa
huli siya


Challenge IV: Late
citybuoy 
 ןıuǝ oɟ ɟןıƃɥʇ 
Manila Bitch 

4 comments:

  1. What I love about this is that it's free verse and it's in Filipino, which is seriously, for me, the most difficult to write.

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  2. I like the sense of dread that this poem successfully captures despite its brevity. At the end of it, I almost felt scared for the character.

    Agree with the previous comment, it's hard to master the Filipino language like this.

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  3. rei: i don't write in tagalog frequently because of the difficulty

    leader: hahah! i'm happy to have conveyed the right feeling

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  4. what really stands out is how dark the character is. And Camille is right, he is scary. I smell revenge

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